Monday, May 27, 2019
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Jack, you have explained the perspective of your main character very well. It was a tragic moment when the gardener was killed by the musket (spear like object). A suggestion for your next post is that you explain the reason you wrote the story. Did you study NZ history? Could you tell me more about the 'First Encounter' in Tūranganui a Kiwa?
ReplyDeleteThanks for the feedback, I'll try to work on it. By the way, very nice surprise to see somebody from out of my school comment on my blog.
DeleteKia ora Jack, I love your writing. You drew me in with your descriptive phrases, then 'wham', he was dead! Did you create the graphic supporting this piece?
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing it with us.
Mrs Burt
Manaiakalani
Oh thanks for commenting on my blog, yeah I did draw the background for this piece.
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